Interesting...
I have to say, I swear I was listening to one of those NewAge nature cds from the 90s XD. The intro was absolutely perfect, and I must say the best part of the entire song for me. Some really nice synth and texture laying.
I wasn't expecting the way you took the piece. It surprised me a lot. I was expecting a long drawn out minimal track, but you changed it to.. I don't know what to call it. Electro-arabian, I don't know... Its an interesting sound, but some things you should fix are the bass. Turn the lower frequencies down a bit and the highs, a bit higher. It would give it a less muddy sound, I think. Also the main percussion sounds a bit too muddy, possibly from too much reverb. Turning the reverb dry/wet knob down could help.
The arping synth surprisingly fit very well with the whole theme. If you had told me you were putting an arping synth when you were making an desert style piece, I'd probably think it was a bad idea, but it really works here.
Overall, you've improved a lot, since the old days of NG/ Keep it up man. :D
-SineRider